Those of you who've actually read the sidebar probably know that we rose from the ashes of one Rob Bricken, commentator of FanFiction Friday. Well there's one story he refused to review, he even avoided the name as best he could, simply dubbing it The Other Story. Well we're a little less squeamish, so here's How Videl Discovered her Abortion Fetish.
I copied this straight from Rob’s post, and he’s right, the nonsensical indents are painful to look at. But, I’m not fixing them either. They’ll serve as a reminder to how bad this story is.
Videl was a 18-year old, good-looking girl with long
legs and short, black hair.
Sounds good so far.
Yeah, but it always confuses me when fanfiction writers throw in a brief description of their character. Isn’t that something the readers should already know?
Se had a boyfriend and a fairly
normal sex life,
There indents almost make it look like poetry. Almost.
meaning she had sex with him usually
every day. He was boy number two in her life and so far
she had used the pill as contraception successfully.
So she was not too interested in the subject of
abortion except she was pro choice but rather in a
Good to know!
Of course, would she get pregnant she
would know where and how to obtain an abortion.
Is that something most people just know about?
legal in Japan up to 12 weeks on demand and in
neighbouring Thailand nobody will ask any question up to 22
weeks and in some clinics 28 weeks (not exactly legal,
but openly tolerated). So she didn't
Bother with what? Getting one before she’s pregnant?
It was on a July-weekend in Osaka when she dropped
by in a bookshop and had a look at the "women's corner",
Wow, they get a whole corner?
where everything from the latest diet to sex tips was the trade
of the day. She opened a book on sexual self-determination and
somehow she took some time to have a look at the chapter dealing with
Meaning she immediately went there from the index.
The different techniques from suction over
dilation and curettage, dilation and evacuation or intact
extraction, saline abortion and even caesarean abortion were
laid out in graphic detail and some of the pictures
really caught her attention.
Can we also get some pictures? Because I have a feeling we’re going to be very lost without them.
Relax, I’m a doctor.
Although some of the photos
of inserted forceps pulling out foetal body parts
looked pretty disturbing on first sight, a nge
So disturbing the author lost the ability to type.
fascination made Videl virtually stare at them. She made
sure nobody could look over her shoulders seeing what
she was reading
In the anime universe, that seems like an impossible task. Besides, Hentai Man is always watching.
All hail the Hentai!
and looking at and started to absorb
every little detail the book could provide. She
bought it and went to her Hotel. Reading over the
chapter she came to the second chapter on abortion, the
title of which nearly stopped her breathing: "Are
“No, the end.”
She had always thought of abortion
as a necessary evil and a right that women should be
able to exercise without being questioned, but
thinking of them as something enjoyable did never come to
And why would it?
Because the book said so, and everything in books is true.
Nevertheless she started wondering whether
her own morbid interest in reading the stuff did not
have the same undercurrent feeling that the books
author laid out on the pages in front of her eyes.
Don’t phrase it so uncertainly; we read the title, we know where this is going.
breaking the taboo of killing the unborn
Fun fact, foetus is just the British spelling of fetus, like honour or humour. Neither of which are going to be in this story, but still.
and about the sexual arousal and the feeling of
helplessness women experienced lying on the abortion table
that contributed to it.
Sounds more like a submissive fetish. That’s my diagnosis.
It also reported many women
obtaining the procedure enjoyed the feeling of being
So take a shit, make that your fetish.
the contraction of the uterus in the process of
the vacuum suction and going with it a sexual arousal
that in many instances lead to climactic orgiastic
experiences for them.
FFF band name #163, Climactic Orgiastic. Don’t worry Rob, we’re carrying the torch.
Videl did not know how long
had had been reading the intricate and delicate
details of the descriptions dealing with abortion
experiences from 5 weeks gestation to 39, when her boyfriend
knocked at her door and wanted to come in.
closed the book and put it into her luggage. She did not
want Gohan to see what she was reading, being afraid
he would laugh at her.
Oh yeah, Gohan, that reminds me; why the fuck is this fanfiction? It could have just as easily featured original characters.
When she stood up to go to
the room's door she realised her slip was soaking
wet. It was in fact so wet one could hear her pussy's
lips swamp on every step she made; or so it seemed to
I can hear it all the way through the fourth wall.
"I am with you in a minute, Gohan, just let me
finish my toilette please", she called out.
Did she use Google Translate to go from Japanese to French to English?
She had to
change her slip or else; she was afraid he would hear
What’s her slip? This isn’t in my medbook.
that wet sound from her pussy's lips and wonder why
that was the case. She jumped into the bathroom, cleaned her
dripping pussy with a paper hanky and got a fresh slip. As
she stepped into her room again he sight fell on her
bag, which contained the book, that had captured so
much of her attention this afternoon.
The timeline on this story is confusing me. First she got the book, then she went to a hotel for whatever reason, then Gohan came over, then nothing happened, now I think we’re in some alternative world where something did happen, and now it’s the same day.
a slight shiver thinkingthe the pictures showing
the insertion of forceps, vacuum tubes, sharp bladed
curettes and dilators into other women's vaginas. She knew
she wanted to know more about this.
Has she considered the possibility that she’s a lesbian? Maybe abortion has nothing to do with it.
No, she wanted to
know all about this. She would go to every little
bookshop in town and surf the web in every little corner
to learn everything about abortion and the pleasures
it provided to those knowing.
“Shit, I’m all wet again.”
"Hi, Videl". Their hallo was short and informal.
Videl was aroused from what she just had consumed and
decided she needed satisfaction immediately.
Such erotic word choice here; consumed, immediately, I’m getting a little wet myself.
"I want you
to fuck me here and now, Gohan, she moaned"
Oh good, we’re making My Immortal level grammar mistakes.
before he knew what was happening to him she had opened
his pants, pulled them down and with hands knowing
how to handle him she made him ready in a moment.
She didn’t even have to know how to handle him, it isn’t exactly a secret.
got off her slip, pulled up her skirt and while
laying down on the desk in front of the bed she opened
up her legs and pulled him into her soaking wet
vagina. She closed her eyes as he penetrated her deeply.
"Why does this fuckin' desk not have stirrups or
I’m not sure if she’s saying that the desk is annoying in a fucknig way, or this desk is the fucking desk.
I will give her some credit; considering English clearly isn’t her first language, she did still manage to apostrophicate fucking quite nicely.
she wondered silently while the pumping movements
they both made raised her orgasm very fast to her
Are her horny levels past thirty percent?
She had her eyes still closed and in her
imagination she was lying on a surgical table in a clinic.
Her legs opened and up in the air, the doctor would
enter the room, insert a large tube, penetrate her with
it and suction a foetus out of her wide opened
She has cavities too? She doesn’t need an abortion, she needs a dentist.
Sorry, I’m a doctor not a dentist. And that’s why I’m helping Hent with science.
The imagination of receiving an abortion heightened
her sexual feelings once more and as she came again
she could not suppress a whisper saying "suck it,
please, suck it out". Gohan was too busy with his own
orgasm to register she had said anything that didn't
make sense to him.
Can confirm, she could have said literally anything right then.
With a loud breathing he ejaculated
into her and as they both came Vids cos convulsively
Hurray for alliteration?
muscle suctioned his warm sperm into her
uterus and up into her ovaries where they happened to
meet the result of Videl forgetting to take the pill
Immediately, it all happened that exact second.
Any 8th grade sex ed will teach you that the egg takes at least a week to hatch.
"Ohhh, yessss, that was so good,
I just needed that right now" she said ohanohan
Google Translate has confirmed that this isn’t a word in any language, although it did detect a similarity to Maori.
when he pulled out of her and a stream of liquid, a
mixture of sperm and her own wetness, flowed out of her
vagina onto the carpet next to the desk.
It is a fucking desk!
Sounds like me after every orgasm.
"I didn't know you were a fan of quickies, but I
have to admit, it was a nice surprise. We could to
that more often." "Yes, Gohan, I think we
Back home in Tokyo,
Because apparently this Dragon Ball fanfiction takes place in the real world.
Videl had a good time. Having
Sex with Gohan was still good, though she had an
adventure with a good looking guy from the Capsule Corporation,
whom she loved to fuck in dangerous
In general she had developed a sense for
"dangerous situations" and used them as a turn on.
That’s another fetish all on its own.
Fetish count: 3
Fetish count: 4
I haven’t actually found a fourth one yet, but when it’s three you get the :3 emoticon, and there can be nothing remotely cute in this story.
Gohan provided her "bread and butter" sex, and Vegeta was
her little in-between-excitement. But with both guys
she had used her new imagination about having an
abortion as a way to increase her orgiastic pleasure. She
had searched the web for information on it, but what
she had found so far was off pretty little value,
either in terms of information or in terms of turn
You don’t say‽
It was early October when she somehow felt unease
over her current relationships with the two guys.
Yes, somehow. To be honest I’m not even opposed to much in this story; abortion, polygamy, I give zero fucks. What I do care about is that this character is kind of an idiot, and that’s just wrong.
was still using the pill, but recently she had felt
some sickness when getting up in the morning. Maybe
she should consult a doctor
You’re pregnant, bitch. And really fucked up, you should really see my friend Hent.
and exchange the chemical
contraceptive she was using for another one. She would go on
Friday next week.
"Young lady, I am afraid changing the
contraceptive is not exactly what I can prescribe to you right
now", her gynaecologist explained to her. "You are 16
“Well what contraceptive can you offer me?”
You are not prepared for that news, are
"No, I am not", she replied,
“I’m actually ecstatic.”
"but nowadays that should
not be a problem, should it?" "Well, here in Japan
you need a reason such as health grounds for an
abortion after 12 weeks,
Why did the doctor say, “Here in Japan”?
but a friend of mine, a Japanese
gynaecologist, is running a facility in Bangkok.
A gynaecologist in Bangkok, now you’re just fucking with us.
providing abortion services up to 22 weeks on demand, up to
36 weeks if there is a health problem whatsoever. Do
you want the address?"
"Yes please", Videl
said and on her way back to her apartment she
“Was arrested because it was a setup, the end.”
to get excited already thinking of the prospect to
have something in real life that was theoretical or
fantasy up to now. Arriving at home she immediately
called the clinic in Bangkok. "You are 16 weeks
pregnant, you said?" "Yes, exactly." "That won't be any
problem. We can offer you an appointment next Friday. The
size of your pregnancy will not require you stay
Well, there goes my One Night in Bangkok joke.
but we can to that on a "walk in walk out" basis.
"Can I stay awake during the procedure?" Videl
wanted to know. She had been thinking about it and found
out she had developed a real fetish for having an
and it was clear she could only hope for the joy
promised in that book if she was not asleep when the
doctor exterminated her foetus. "No problem, that is
your personal choice" was the answer she had hoped
She took the plane to Bangkok and was lucky to have
a sunshiny day when she arrived.
Are we actually going to have a cheery montage before the abortion fetish thing?
The clinic was
only a two-minute walk from the airport and her first
impression was "oh this is a very large clinic. How many
abortions do they perform here?" The leaflet she got at the
reception answered her question: 50 abortions everyday,
Saturday and Sunday service included,
Saturday and Sunday service almost makes it sound like a church.
18.500 every year
So in America they do eighteen and a half every year, but in Britain they do eighteen thousand five hundred.
since 1985. Many patients were women with jobs, so
having their abortion on the weekend was just a
convenient thing for them. The nurse at the reception did
all the paperwork, billed 450 Dollars on her Amex
A lot cheaper than a baby.
A lot more expensive than a dildo.
brought her directly to the ObGyn, where the abortion
Good call on the team, what if that little shit tries to run?
of a doctor and another nurse was already
preparing the instruments for her procedure. She had
the documents with her pre-exam from her
gynaecologist in Tokyo with her and all she had to do before
she could obtain her abortion was an ultrasound. She
laid down on the abortion table and the nurse inserted
the ultrasound device into her vagina.
In my professional opinion, that is not an ultrasound. Now if that had said coat hanger…
she was 5 months pregnant. So she was two weeks
longer with foetus than she initially had heard in
Tokyo. Your foetus is comparatively large for a five
months pregnancy, but we have techniques to deal with
that, so don't worry, the abortion doctor explained to
Of course, even in the abortion story the protagonist has to be special.
?As this is your first abon, on, I will explain
everything to you before we start.
I’ll get the popcorn.
We will start with the
termination by dilating your cervix carefully inserting steel
rods and soften the muscle with an injection of
laineaine and prostaglandine.
Tagout, the story lost me. Martin, you got this.
I will then insert a suction
canula of about 2 inches diameter into your uterus and
remove the foetal limbs,
Limbs? Last time I saw a vagina it didn’t have limbs.
the intestines and the brain by
suction. The head and the body will be crushed and removed
by forceps, the placenta will be scraped out using a
sharp curette. At the end another suction session will
complete the abortion and your unwanted pregnancy will be
Oh no, this was very intentional.
"How can you know this is unwanted?"
And now that the actual science is gone, I’m back. And I have to say, until I read the tag I actually thought she said that out loud.
"I need to be pregnant to have an abortion, and ever
since reading that book I have wanted to get
Wait… was that one out loud?
"so please move your pelvis down a little bit. It
is necessary to place your vagina just above the
steel bowl attached to the lower end of the abortion
table, so that the tissue we remove from your uterus
directly falls into it when it slips out through the
Ok, speculum is not a word, trust me I’m a doctor.
Sure it is, I saw the colour speculum the other day.
Now put your legs into the knee rests, open up
Even when reading a story like this, a random phrase still manages to put a song in my head.
please and relax, it won't hurt a bit".
“Get me a coat hanger and a bottle of scotch!”
Videl started to feel the excitement she had experienced when
she read the book in the Osaka store for the first
time. She was pretty sure she could answer that
question already. "Are abortions fun?" "You bet, she
thought, this is going to be the orgasm of my life".
Considering how much more detail this has than the actual sex, I guess she’s probably right.
the doctor inserted the speculum into her vagina she
felt like being penetrated with a large dildo. Her
vaginal muscles contracted and she took a deep breath in
her shivering arousal. In her fantasy she went ahead
and already imagined the forceps and the suction tube
inside of her taking care of the foetus. After injecting
the lidocaine and some prostaglandine
Wait, don’t forget the iocaine!
inserted the dilator rods into her cervix and carefully
stretched and widened it. The opening in her cervix was
soon stretched to 2 inches. The doctor could now
insert a sound to measure the exact size of the uterus
Was it the sound of a dumb story being read aloud?
and decide which forceps to use for dismembering the
foetal tissue. Her uterus was already more than 10
inches deep behind the cervical opening. The abortionist
decided he would stretch the cervix to 4 inches using a
new tool that could be inserted and expanded
uniformly like a camera shutter.
♫ I turn my camera on, I turn my… ♫ God dammit.
He inserted it and
expanded the cervix slowly and stepwise until he had
reached 4.5 inches to compensate for the expected
contraction when he took the device out again.
Videl could hardly stop her pelvis from making circular
movements meanwhile. In her imagination she was patient and
abortionist at the same , cu, cutting the foetus into pieces
and pulling them out of the open speculum before
placing the lacerated limbs into the waste bin under the
abortion table. Her vagina started to contract and hold
the speculum under tension. She was so excited now
she was about to come.
To her senses?
When the nurse told her the
doctor would now start to insert the canula for the
first session of suction curettage she climaxed the
So many made up words.
As she came moaning and groaning her cervix
convulsed visibly. The doctor inserted the suction machine
and switched it on. He inserted the tongs of age
forceps-scissors and cut of the limbs off the foetus. He than
moved the tip of the suction canula directly to the
amputated limbs and sucked them out of the uterus into the
steel bowl between Videl's legs.
Rob, I’m disappointed. This story isn’t unbearably awful, it’s just kind of boring and technical. You could’ve handled it.
He then cut off the
umbilical cord and started opening the foetal body with a
pointed pair of scissors to insert the suction tube into
the foetus. A few seconds later the intestines were
spit into the steel bowl and only the emptied torso,
the skull and the placenta were still inside
Videl's slightly swollen belly. "We call this
procedure a scrap suction. We use it, when the foetus is
small enough to be removed by suction, but too large
and the tissue to tough to be dismembered by the
pressure of the suction machine", the nurse explained.
Has Videl considering being an abortionist? It would suit her, and with all of the exposition they’re piling on her she could probably start today.
Videl could feel how the flow of foetal tissue was
vacuumed out of her and the orgiastic feeling rose again
until the wave of contractions gave her another climax.
As she came her uterus compressed and pushed the
suction tube out through the cervical canal.
Alright doctor, on a scale of one to ten is that total bulshit?
doctor this was a familiar phenomenon. He knew that many
of his patients had orgasms during the suction
procedure and he never used a pointed canula because of
this so as to avoid wounding the uterus when his
patients reached a climax. He reinserted the tube and
began crushing the head and the torso with a flat-blade
forceps. Again the shredded pieces were suctioned out as
he cut them from the foetus and to pieces and the
steel bowl was filled with the abortion product.
I can see why the church doesn’t like abortions, too squeamish about it.
Videl knew that most her foetus was now removed
from her womb and that in the process it had been
exterminated. She asked the nurse not to throw it away as she
wanted to see the remains when the procedure was over.
She assumed it could give her another kick.
Because that’s not weird to say.
doctor had completed the scrap-suction and inserted a
long curette to cut the placenta off the uterine walls
and scrap it out through the opened vagina, where it
dropped into the steel bowl with the aborted foetus. A
last session of suction to clean her out and the
abortion was over. During the whole 40 minutes of the
termination Videl came three times. She now knew exactly
what the book she found in the Osaka bookstore was
talking about. This was an experience she would want to
♫ Life goes on, come of age, can’t hold on, turn the page… ♫ Son of a bitch, if you readers find this annoying, just imagine; I get to live with it.
As she relaxed herself on the abortion
table the shredded pieces of the aborted foetus lay in
the steel bowl placed under the lower end of the
table between the knee rests. "We will now reassemble it
to check everything has been completely removed from
“Well, not really, we’re just having a contest. Johnson can reassemble one in two minutes, but I think I can top it.”
After that your abortion will be over and
done. Your may relax for an hour or two in a room
provided here at the clinic before you leave. We hope you
enjoyed our service", the nurse said to her. "Can
I see it?" Videl asked the nurse. "Of course,
here it is", she replied. Videl tried to identify
the foetal body parts, but only the skull and some of
the limbs were still visible, as the other parts were
buried under a bloody soup of placenta tissue and a pulp
of squashed foetal organs. A last shiver went down
her spine looking at the foetus she had aborted
before the remains were brought to the waste
Videl left the clinic and programmed the reception's
number into her cell phones memory. She knew she would
use it again.
That must be awkward for someone else to find on her phone. Unless of course she listed it as, “Not the abortion clinic,” which is exactly how much credit I’m willing to give her.