Review #124

Loving Pain

Story by A Dark Secret

Review by Ray




We might never find a story that can induce as much PTSD as Cub Training Institute, but dammit, we've been looking. And in that search, we came across Loving Pain.


And just from the title, Loving Pain, I can tell this story will be about as original as the rest of the rapey shit we review.

I don’t know if I’m gonna be able to do this, looks long.

That's what Warnuts said to Hent last night, but he managed to go through with it.

 

Ryuu lifted the tiny nekomimi boy's hips off the bed and lined himself up.

I’m already confused.

Nekomimi is Japanese, and it basically refers to an anime girl with cat ears. But since it's a boy in this case, your guess is as good as mine.

"Please don't!" the boy begged as tears streamed down his face, his entire body trembling in fear.

"Don't? What do you mean, don't? There are 530 words left, and by the rules of erotica, no only means no if there's not enough time left for a rape scene."

Ryuu ignored him and thrust in. The small child screamed in pain.

Come on Ryuu, at least practice some etiquette; there's always time for lubricant.

He was so small, his body couldn't take as much as Ryuu was forcing him to and it hurt more than it should.

Hurt more than it should?

 

"Please st-stop! It h-hurts!" he choked. His mouth opened wide as another scream left him. Saliva and tears dripped on the bed, soaking the sheets. Sweat dripped down his body as Ryuu pressed harder and deeper.

Ah yes, I beleive Harder Deeper Faster Stronger was Daft Punk's alternative take. But they couldn't decide between that and this, so they split the difference.

The boy only stopped screaming in pain to gasp for breath or choke on his sobs.

I thought you said this was like cub training? Or are these also animals somehow?

Sort of, the nekomimi boy probably has animal ears and some type of tail. But mostly I was referring to the part where he rapes a child and acts like it's all cool.

I see.

Blood trailed down his leg from the rough joining. Ryuu wrapped a warm arm around his chest and pumped the boy's flesh with his other hand.

Flesh could mean a few things here, and really, I think I'm alright with not knowing which one Dark Secret had in mind when writing this.

Ryuu knew the boy was too small, but he didn't like it any other way.

 

He let the boy drool on the bed as he cried, too put out to scream anymore. Ryuu stuck his finger in the youth's mouth, letting him bite it to cope with the pain a little better. Ryuu stopped thrusting for a minute and the boy stopped biting. Instead he sucked on it like a soother as he cried. Ryuu continued pumping him and the boy rocked into his hand, cringing as it caused friction where they were still joined but unable to stop.

Unable, unwilling, ungivingadamn, what's the difference?

Slowly, Ryuu started moving again and the boy whimpered as it rubbed against the painfully raw spots inside him. He turned his head away from the finger that was still in his mouth.

"Please stop, take it out." He cried quietly, shaking violently. Ryuu stuck his finger back in his mouth, not letting him take it out.

We've reviewed this type of story before, Pleasure Pain being the most recent example, and I still just can't sympathize with this point of view. I've tried. I've made an effort to get into these characters' heads and figure out just what the hell they're thinking, but I just don't get it; I don't think rape is good.

 

Homopedobestiality on the other hand, that somehow makes more sense.

Ryuu leant over, trapping the nekomimi's tail between his chest and the youth's back.

Really? Now you're going to pull his tail?

 

He moaned as it twisted between their bodies and rubbed against his nipple. He thrust harder as it writhed, the soft fur tickling his torso in a pleasant way. The boy struggled desperately to get his tail free but only succeeded in arousing Ryuu even more.

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Finally, Ryuu managed to bring the youth to a climax and forced himself to follow so he wouldn't have to hurt him anymore. He withdrew and the boy collapsed on the bed, weak, sore, and in a rough shape. He trembled unstoppably from pain and curled up in a guarded ball, his tail wrapping around his small body.

"I'm sorry." Ryuu apologized sadly, kissing the boy on his forehead. And he meant it.

I’m sorry? Words can’t explain how much that doesn’t make up for it.

The nekomimi whimpered as Ryuu picked him up, cradling him easily in one arm as he walked them over to the bath. He ran the warm water and climbed in, resting the boy in his lap so he wouldn't drown in the huge tub.

How fucking thoughtful.

Slowly and gently, he began to wash the youth.

"N-no." the boy argued weakly when Ryuu began to wash the blood off between his legs.

Hypothetically, the boy could run. I'm not saying that justifies what Ryuu did in any way, I'm just saying that the behavior here isn't the most realistic.

Welp, there wasn’t a lot to make fun of in this one, the grammar was decent and the spelling was fine. Somewhat realistic in his phrasing, at least enough to be believable. Still a crackpot story about rape, but can’t say it was my favorite either.

Yup, it wasn't for me, but for the right audience the writing wasn't half bad. And that reminds me. Dark Secret, we begrudgingly give to you the Spell Check award.

 

Whoooo, someone finally did it!

"Shh. I won't do anything. I'm just washing you." He soothed. Ryuu could feel the boy's body slowly sink into his chest as he fell asleep. He watched the boy's steady breathing and knew he was finally relaxed. Ryuu finished cleaning them and dried them off before taking them back to a clean bed and lying down to sleep.